Beanie Kids Forum - MY BOOOK chap 1

This is the book i'm writing is it good???

Hurry up Cary yelled as she ran way in front of Jazz. hurry hurry hurry hey be quiet Carly your being way to loud. So don’t you even care about the Fireworks? Yes Carly I do but it’s still a whole hour away cant you just slow down a bit. But we still have to go and pick up Kate and I want to get a good seat. Hey Carly calm down ok your right lets go to Kate’s place now. Ok the girls walked down the road to Kate’s. It was a summery day the sun was blaring in their eyes. It’s so hot Jazz said Carly I know it’s boiling Jazz Answered. Knock knock knock went the door as Jazz punched it with her fist. It opened straight away and a very exited Kate ran through the door with a bag of nibbles. Hi she said very excitedly I love fireworks the girls laughed and kept walking. They walked on the park was about a 30 minute walk they had been walking for about 10 minutes when they heard a big bang. The girls jumped what was that asked Kate looking scared and shocked. I have no idea Kate answered Jazz they looked around it was still hot and the girls where feeling hot and now scared. Carly turned to her right and saw a fallen tree hey
Do you think that’s it? she said as she tapped jazz on the shoulder. Jazz turned around and looked maybe should we keep walking asked Kate who was now thinking that she would rather go home and play her computer. Yes it’s just a tree Kate don’t be scared said Jazz. Yeah lets not ruin our day said Carly. Kate really didn’t want to go but she did she walked on with her friends jumping whenever she heard a noise hey look she yelled to her friends who where quite far in front. They turned around and came back to Kate what they said look Kate pointed into a big hole from where the tree fell. Wow breathed Carly locking down the hole just don’t fall in said Kate. Kate you such a sceardy cat you always worry watch this Carly said she pretended to fall in whoa whoa she laughed what about this she put one of her legs over the hole whoa whoa aghhhhh she fell down Carly screamed Kate and Jazz. Bang Carly are you alright yelled Kate who was to scared to be crying she was just screaming every thing down the hole ouch ouch said Carly. Carly yelled Jazz happy to hear her friends voice. Are you ok yelled Kate yes I think so then Carly just stopped talking. Carly carly yelled the two dead scared girls yes she answered you guys have got to come down here why screamed Kate no way am I going to go down a hole that I cant get out of. But this is amazing its incredible. What is it yelled jazz I cant tell you just come. No said Kate again now in tears not knowing what to do. Should I go back and get Mum said Kate. Ok echoed Cary’s voice came back. Just when Kate got up she felt something on her back. She knew that jazz felt something to because she made a little scream they looked at each other then behind them. It was luke who was the school bully he gave a slight grin then pushed them down the hole kate just plummeted down but Jazz was sure that she was not going to she grabbed onto lukes shirt she expected that he would eather help her up or push her down again but he just fell down to. Aghhhh they screamed as they fell down the deep hole. Bang why did you do that screamed luke why did you pll me down to you’re a freak I could have told someone I’m not that heartless that I wouldn’t have but now thanks two you where stuck down here forever guys look said kate nudging jazz wow the group just starred at what they saw.