My new book !!!DEAD LEAF!!!

[Annalee]

Chapter 1: Dark clouds
bOOK: Dead Leaf

I heasatated, my tummy started to turn i could feal a nausea coming.
When my best friend Julie panickly suggested "Open your eyes know Charmain, why have you stopped breathing!" That's when i noticed, i had not been breathing. I shackingly inhaled  Julies 'G-Force, Princess' perfume. I decied to slowly open my eyes, but something struck my right leg it was a soft push of pain. After a couple of minuts it begain to trob . When i heard sigrens from a distence it became loader and loader. I heard tyers screach, Then realized that i am being lifted. I tryed to shake the cold hands bringing me of the ground. "Sweet heart just relax, all will be well." my mothers vioce came from left side. I automatically new if my mother was here, i am safe. Once i the abulance I fealt a cold, soft hand grab my right elbow, then smoothed it out. Somthimg sharp sug into my skin, just when i realized it was a needle i drifted off.

[phoebestar909]

Pretty good

[Annalee]

Pretty good

Thanks

[oliros]

Cool book!
When are you posting the rest?
Hope to hear it soon!

[appleefv]

Awesome! love to read more!!
little advice make your chapters longer only because your story is so good I WANT TO READ MORE!!! haha

[NeverSayNever]

☆ It is good, except there is quite a few spelling mistakes. If you could fix that and make the chapter's longer, it would be great. I hope I haven't offended you in anyway. ☆