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shannybanny
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« on: February 04, 2010, 06:37:32 PM »
this is a story that i am writing i need help from u to Finnish what i started


It is a another day of school for me, my eyes just hardly open, my teacher is mumbling something about division that I have never even heard of. I am just glaring at the whiteboard till something happened, the whiteboard started flashing white and black until a sudden stop:  Every one was scared out  of the room.Then something appeared  on the board, it said Charlotte,Charlotte please meet me at the bus shelter. Every thing went blurry, till, I heard this Charlotte,Charlotte come out of the room there might be a very dangerous power wave we need to get down to the bus shelter. it was my teacher calling. I could not move as I looked to the Board, and it was flashing all different colours colours

NOW I NEED U TO COME UP WITH SOME MORE  Grin Wink
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« Reply #1 on: February 04, 2010, 07:17:44 PM »
OMG THATS AWSOME!!! i need more!!!
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« Reply #2 on: February 05, 2010, 02:50:40 PM »
Thats pretty good. Cheesy

If I can suggest, though, is to use more punctuation. Puncuation is like commans [,] full stops [.] etc. [=
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I really need you guys to understand: its nothing personal, it’s a new chapter in my life. I won't forget about you guys, I'm just going to turn the page. Maybe use a new colour pen to write with; and I'll be merrily on my way.
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« Reply #3 on: February 05, 2010, 03:54:50 PM »
this is one o f those story's where i don't care about punctuation
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« Reply #4 on: February 05, 2010, 04:08:31 PM »
Every story needs to have puncuation, its makes the story easy to read and it helps people understand it better. Wink
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I really need you guys to understand: its nothing personal, it’s a new chapter in my life. I won't forget about you guys, I'm just going to turn the page. Maybe use a new colour pen to write with; and I'll be merrily on my way.
goodbye.
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« Reply #5 on: February 05, 2010, 04:18:43 PM »
I TRIED TO FIX IT
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« Reply #6 on: February 07, 2010, 04:09:37 PM »
Thats way better!

When will you add more? Cheesy
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I really need you guys to understand: its nothing personal, it’s a new chapter in my life. I won't forget about you guys, I'm just going to turn the page. Maybe use a new colour pen to write with; and I'll be merrily on my way.
goodbye.
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« Reply #7 on: February 07, 2010, 04:10:25 PM »
thats awesome
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« Reply #8 on: February 07, 2010, 04:14:24 PM »
very soon  Grin Grin Grin Grin Grin Grin Grin Grin Grin Grin
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