my story Whisper blurb only ATM

[rach2]

hey guys i decided to write a story

i have only got the blurb finished at the moment


here it goes

BLURB

spin the bottle he dares me toying with my mind i hold my knees close by keeping the tears inside
i clutched the bottle tight, the right side of  me and it would be the bad side forever no way out, the left side and i could stay myself but only for a second, I cringed silently thoughtlessy  i descided to pick up the bottle and spin. the small glass bottle had my immortality on the line i took a deep breath twisted my fingers and the bottle slowly span round and round.

do you like the blurb critisium welcome do think i should write more


my fournt cover to be

http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3011/2954404460_473abbf13d.jpg

[I_Want_to_Be_a_VAMPiRE]

Love it.

[FinlayKameko]

:/

[rach2]

Love it.

thanks going to write more now

[rach2]

page 1

my story is copyright and can not be published or used in any way with out permission from me first


i awoke after a chiling night to the sound of my voice being called mother adelle ,Adelle you will be late for school hurry up i had almost forgotton it was the second last week of year 11  jumped out bed brushed my hair and walked to school as fast as could my long honey blonde curled locks were in my face i stopped in fournt of a old mans house and pulled my hair to one side and started to run slowedgot to queen street and heard the first bell after the noise of the bell cleareed my ears i heard footsteps behind me i politly continued walking i felt as i was being draged backward by an uncontrable force i finally decided to say "BACK OFF " i was suddenly facing a irrisistable 17 teen year old boy with perfect fetures not a freckle in sight nor a blemish or imperfection on his whole body he was he was perfect i muttered under my breath he herd and chuckled i stared into his golden eyes with tint of crisom it seemed like a eternaty looking into his alluring eyes in a agile streak i hit hard againist a brick wall with him sitting oppisite me with a poker face Adelle belle femme adorée whatever i spoke the words clearly so he would hear there lay an old beer bottle dregs and all. he lightly joked how would you like to be like me Perfect alluring beautiful




more wil be posted soon

[beanie love]

OMG thats great.

The only thing fixing up is the spelling 

[deanne]

Thst awesome, but really hard to unerstand as you have more or less no punctuation.