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« on: May 14, 2010, 08:48:11 PM »
Hey Guys, Im not a pro-writer or anything but Im bored and feel like writing a story. Feedback would be nice (:

Here we go;

His blue-grey eyes glanced over to me. Of course, 5 minutes into his new class and already he thinks I’m the freak. I mean, yeah sure; my parents are divorced, my brother died last year and I look different from everyone else. I liked being myself but when people judged me by how I dressed? Unacceptable.
His name was Chris. He didn’t know me but I know plenty about him. The great thing about a small school and small town is that you know everything and everyone. It’s been the only thing everyone at school has been talking about. I can understand that because of the way they all gathered around him. I wish I could have shouted “GIVE HIM SOME AIR, YOU IDIOTS!” but seeing as my teacher already hated me, I didn’t want to push the rest of my luck. Next thing you know, I could be up in the principals office signing papers for my expulsion. Then we would be off to the big city, and I did not want that to happen. Only another 4 more years until I’m a free adult.  No rules, nothing.

After class finished, Sir wanted to talk to me and by the tone of his voice, someone must have forgotten to take their happy pills this morning and wasn’t he angry. Apparently my actions a couple of days ago were irresponsible, blah blah blah. So what if I threw a dictionary at some random fat kid, not my fault he wouldn’t move his big butt.
I walked; no wait! Stomped sounds better, out of the classroom, I just had to magically bump into Chris. And he just had to magically make me drop my bag so it would fall everywhere, and then he just had to say sorry and pick it up for me. Then... he just had to look at me with his... sweet, gentle eyes... –sigh.


Its not much so far but I just wanted to know if I should change anything so far.
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« Reply #1 on: May 15, 2010, 12:45:11 PM »
Awesome!~!!!!!
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« Reply #2 on: May 16, 2010, 03:50:43 PM »
Quote from: melovebeanies on May 15, 2010, 12:45:11 PM
Awesome!~!!!!!
Haha, thanks.
I forgot about this then I was cleaning my computer and found the story Tongue
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« Reply #3 on: May 16, 2010, 03:57:44 PM »
Em, you say your not an unproffesionall writer, well that was a very proffesionall story and very well done! Love it and WRITE MORE.
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« Reply #4 on: May 16, 2010, 03:59:33 PM »
Love It! :O


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« Reply #5 on: May 16, 2010, 04:00:28 PM »
Quote from: poniesrule on May 16, 2010, 03:57:44 PM
Em, you say your not an unproffesionall writer, well that was a very proffesionall story and very well done! Love it and WRITE MORE.
Aww Smiley Thanks Simone.
I wrote something like this last year and I got a highly commended or something like that. Im writing more now. Smiley
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« Reply #6 on: May 16, 2010, 04:04:31 PM »
Quote from: *em** on May 16, 2010, 04:00:28 PM
Aww Smiley Thanks Simone.
I wrote something like this last year and I got a highly commended or something like that. Im writing more now. Smiley
So you should be commended it was so good.  Grin
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« Reply #7 on: May 16, 2010, 04:17:35 PM »
A tiny bit more added
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Quote from: *em** on May 16, 2010, 04:17:35 PM
A tiny bit more added
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