I Had A Dream

[poniesrule]

I was a little girl alone in my little world who dreamed of a little home for me. I had a dream that i could fly from the highest tree. I had a dream that you and me would meet. I had a dream. I remember back on the 10th of September when my life switched gears, my usually amazing best friend decided i wasn't good enough for her anymore so my life has changed, has it changed for the best, i don't know. I'm 18 now and i don't know what to do, do i take this road or that road or this road or no road. I wish i could just back to when all i was A Little Girl and all i said was I Had A Dream.

 Story i am working on for the hols.
Love it or Hate it?
Opinions? Improvments.
Thanks.

[VanesseUmiko]

what ideas?

[poniesrule]

Like more for the blurb.

[VanesseUmiko]

hmm, how about,,


I had a dream that I was a little girl alone in my little world who dreamed of a little home for me. I had a dream that i could fly from the highest tree. I had a dream that you and me would meet. I had a dream. Horses and ponies, my oh my!
This is a dream I didn't want to end. This was my dream dream. Until, a dark shadow appeared above my little world.
And it  started to rain. A shadow of a man appeared in front of me. He seemed to be holding a knife.
I was frightened. I wanted this dream to end. My dream dream turned into a nightmare.

[poniesrule]

Thanks, i was thinking though of something like um best friends drifing away slowly, growing up into an adult kinda etc and she doesn't want to.

[VanesseUmiko]

ooh okay.

[VanesseUmiko]

what about this;

I had a dream I was a little girl alone in my little world who dreamed of a little home for me. I had a dream that i could fly from the highest tree. I had a dream that you and me would meet. I had a dream. I never wanted to grow up.
I always wanted to be a kid. Growing up is..Scary, if you know what I mean. And my best friend is drifting away from me.
No one supports me. What am I going to do?

[poniesrule]

Thankyou Vanessa, your story idea's have been FANTASTIC.
But i think i finally have it, do you like it?
I was a little girl alone in my little world who dreamed of a little home for me. I had a dream that i could fly from the highest tree. I had a dream that you and me would meet. I had a dream. I remember back on the 10th of September when my life switched gears, my usually amazing best friend decided i wasn't good enough for her anymore so my life has changed, has it changed for the best, i don't know. I'm 18 now and i don't know what to do, do i take this road or that road or this road or no road. I wish i could just back to when all i was A Little Girl and all i said was I Had A Dream.

[VanesseUmiko]

thats great!

[poniesrule]

THANKS

[poniesrule]

Opinions would be great guys.